draft media release German version revised, heading for Thursday
Dear all
please see attached the German version revised with track changes. Most of them are triggered from comments made by Dagmar.
I did not follow these suggestions in these details: I would not delete the CRISPR-issue (but it is shortened), I think this most relevant issue to mobilise political support and it is also nicely framed by the quote of Oxfam. Since Simon (SWISSAID) is away, I would propose to leave this topic to Oxfam in both languages (or in German to PublicEye, if interested).
I also would not introduce some further explanations (as proposed by Dagmar), I think it is better reading in this version.
I propose to give the first quote to Judith and wait for Erling to respond on the English version of the quote.
The English version to follow soon, but I wanted to let you know the current stage of the work.
Cheers
Christoph
Dear all, dear Chrisoph,
I understand very well why the quote fits oxfam better. I didn't want to push my way in, just offer. In any case, I am very happy with the quote from Erling!
Thanks johanna for the good pictures!
all the best Judith
Zitat von Christoph Then info@no-patents-on-seeds.org:
Dear all
please see attached the German version revised with track changes. Most of them are triggered from comments made by Dagmar.
I did not follow these suggestions in these details: I would not delete the CRISPR-issue (but it is shortened), I think this most relevant issue to mobilise political support and it is also nicely framed by the quote of Oxfam. Since Simon (SWISSAID) is away, I would propose to leave this topic to Oxfam in both languages (or in German to PublicEye, if interested).
I also would not introduce some further explanations (as proposed by Dagmar), I think it is better reading in this version.
I propose to give the first quote to Judith and wait for Erling to respond on the English version of the quote.
The English version to follow soon, but I wanted to let you know the current stage of the work.
Cheers
Christoph
Dear all,
thanks for all the good work! Looking forward to building more pressure on Carlsberg.. ;)
Attached some minor further suggestions for the text.
Best, Magdalena
-----Ursprüngliche Nachricht----- Von: Npos_2018 [mailto:npos_2018-bounces@testbiotech.de] Im Auftrag von Christoph Then Gesendet: Dienstag, 2. November 2021 16:10 An: npos_2018@testbiotech.de Betreff: [Npos_2018] draft media release German version revised, heading for Thursday
Dear all
please see attached the German version revised with track changes. Most of them are triggered from comments made by Dagmar.
I did not follow these suggestions in these details: I would not delete the CRISPR-issue (but it is shortened), I think this most relevant issue to mobilise political support and it is also nicely framed by the quote of Oxfam. Since Simon (SWISSAID) is away, I would propose to leave this topic to Oxfam in both languages (or in German to PublicEye, if interested).
I also would not introduce some further explanations (as proposed by Dagmar), I think it is better reading in this version.
I propose to give the first quote to Judith and wait for Erling to respond on the English version of the quote.
The English version to follow soon, but I wanted to let you know the current stage of the work.
Cheers
Christoph
Thanks a lot, good PM and good work. Gratulation! We will circulate the PM and also social media. And I will check if we also be part of the petition. Thanks Annemarie Arbeitsgemeinschaft bäuerliche Landwirtschaft
Dear all,
thanks for all the good work! Looking forward to building more pressure on Carlsberg.. ;)
Attached some minor further suggestions for the text.
Best, Magdalena
-----Ursprüngliche Nachricht----- Von: Npos_2018 [mailto:npos_2018-bounces@testbiotech.de] Im Auftrag von Christoph Then Gesendet: Dienstag, 2. November 2021 16:10 An: npos_2018@testbiotech.de Betreff: [Npos_2018] draft media release German version revised, heading for Thursday
Dear all
please see attached the German version revised with track changes. Most of them are triggered from comments made by Dagmar.
I did not follow these suggestions in these details: I would not delete the CRISPR-issue (but it is shortened), I think this most relevant issue to mobilise political support and it is also nicely framed by the quote of Oxfam. Since Simon (SWISSAID) is away, I would propose to leave this topic to Oxfam in both languages (or in German to PublicEye, if interested).
I also would not introduce some further explanations (as proposed by Dagmar), I think it is better reading in this version.
I propose to give the first quote to Judith and wait for Erling to respond on the English version of the quote.
The English version to follow soon, but I wanted to let you know the current stage of the work.
Cheers
Christoph
participants (4)
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Annemarie Volling -
ARCHE NOAH Magdalena Prieler -
Christoph Then -
judith.dueesberg@gen-ethisches-netzwerk.de